Tuesday, April 13, 2010

Poem Starting with a Line from Norman Dubie

A kiss is like a dress falling off a tall building,
slipped into your bones
like a love letter in the mailbox.
It is loose as the wind from the drop
of your dress; your body is disconnected
from flesh: it's a newborn feather, light
and hard to find, easy to lift
like sprinkles of sand
that are poured
and emptied
between soft fingers.

11 comments:

  1. Love how the language follows along the line of the opening image-- a dress floating gently.

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  2. Very Pretty Richelle! Flows nicely!
    Pamela

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  3. I liked how you used all concrete images. Especially liked "like a love letter in the mailbox", deceptively plain... thank you

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  4. the flow of yr pen is a delight in this light dressing.. it is as a woman should feel when she wears a dress!!! poem..

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  5. yes...nice one indeed....thanks for sharing your words

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  6. very nice indeed... I love the flow of it

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  7. That was pretty. It was like that first line was originally yours.

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  8. Beautifully done. I really liked the last few lines, which seems to really pull it all together perfectly.

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  9. Your integration of this first line is seamless--you really made it your own!

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  10. Excellent use of that line! You really kept with the spirit of it, but put your own unique viewpoint on it, as well.

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